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posted April 23rd, 2014, 6:25 pm

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April 23rd, 2014, 6:18 pm

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The story so far/ all the information I've incorporated into the story so far:

The story is about a young zorua that lives in solitude in a gloomy forest. Hehas a secret longing to go out on adventures, but there is something stopping him (although I don't know what yet.) His name is Sylvester, or as the nearby locals often refer to him using the girly nickname: Syl.
The story starts by introducing Sylvester, and hints at his poor lifestyle. We also learn that Zorua rescued a peculiar pokemon, who he is taking care of. This pokemon is none other than a mew. I'm debating on whether or not to have the mew have amnesia.

Thank you all so so much for the 15+ fans, this comic was pretty fun to make so far, even if it is pretty sloppy. I would love if anyone could help with the story so I can continue. Again- thankyou all<3

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April 23rd, 2014, 6:43 pm

Inviseon25 (Guest)

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hmmm
How about since the mew has amnesia and all that she calls Sylvester "brother"

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April 23rd, 2014, 9:16 pm

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Perhaps somthing happened to syl one day when he was about to go on an adventure and he fears if he goes on an adventure again it will happen again although mew wants to help him overcome his fear because syl helped her

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April 24th, 2014, 1:45 am

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Amnesia could be fun, and it does follow the trend of PMD. It'll give Sylvester an excuse to go out and have an adventure.

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April 24th, 2014, 5:06 am

DemonicHero13

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Cool I like to help give me a few days and I should be able to think of a story

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April 24th, 2014, 5:17 am

DemonicHero13

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By the way what kind of story do you want because I have at lest 5 way the story will end

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April 24th, 2014, 9:00 am

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this will be lengthy

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hmmm well first off, do you want the mew to have amnesia or not? also why is syl keeping mew a secret? is it cause mew is legendary? i always liked to think that in the pokemon world mew wast such a big deal like it is in the human world for the reason that the pokemon in the anime dont really seem to care when they meet a legendary.
like in the lucario movie with mew, when the pokemon are playing upstairs they dont seem to care that mew is legendary, i could even go as far as saying they didnt even know he was legendary. ^u^

but there is this idea i had where in the pokemon world, who rules? is there a set king or queen? i also thought that the royal family line was mews and that all places in the pokemon world was ruled by mews. so does that mean that syl found a royal with amnesia?

i could go on with ideas about mew (considering its my fave pokemon other then eevee ;P) so if you need any help with the plot around mew i could help ^u^

oh wait! also are you planing on giving syl illusion powers? i know some people dont include illusion powers for zoura in comics :3 but i think it could be pretty useful in the comic.

example: if mew IS a royal and for some reason doesnt want to go back to being royalty but it was found out that mew is with syl, how will they hide?
mew can transform into any pokemon but syl cant. so if syl can give other pokemon the illusion that he is another pokemon that can be usefull to them UuU

and again if mew is royalty and DOES NOT have amnesia, you could put in he/she (ill keep going with she) got tired of royal life and wanted to be free, so she ran away but got knocked out when syl found her.
(and this could posibly turn into a love story about mews parents not wanting her to have a not royal/mew BF or something like that =^u^= if mew is a girl that is >3>
...unless you want to go in that direction .___.

(wait is mew the girl or is syl a girl... i cant tell .-. lol)

oKKAYYYYYYy so now that ive probably bored you into jumping off the homo bridge ill stop. but if you need any ideas believe it or not i have allot .-. (it doesnt seem like i have allot of ideas does it) XD

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April 24th, 2014, 9:30 am

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@DemonicHero13: Honestly, I'm happy with any ideas presented! So whichever one you like best I suppose... Thank you very much for your help!

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April 24th, 2014, 9:57 am

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This will be lengthy as well

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@andreya225: Hhhh omg I love your ideas and thank you so much for the help!

Well, as for what you asked first: I think I will have mew with amnesia, to stick with a common trend that is in most PMD comic, as @Gigazyber stated. For the reason why Syl (full name is Sylvester)is keeping mew a secret, I like to imagine it's because of the basic fact that mew is a legendary- but I would like to go deeper than that.

I do really like the idea of royalty, since that was apparently never present in the PMD games, and would add something original to the story. Again- I love the idea, and I definitely would like to incorporate it- I kind of like the theme that mew is very rare, even more than royalty. Which is to say, that mew would be above royalty (hence, legendary). And I'm not sure exactly why yet, but I think Syl rescued and took care of mew because...er, actually I will just throw some ideas out there because that's something I don't know at all yet why Syl is taking care of mew... Perhaps the royal pokemon don't like mews? Or perhaps mew was responsible for keeping some sort of important think in balance, and now that mew is gone its been thrown out of balance...

In regard to Syl- I do plan on giving him illusion powers. But he can't use them very well because of his nature, I think.. (Sort of like how rango barely uses his chameleon color change ability in the movie rango (and he can't use it well lol)- if you've seen it. Wierd example sorry haha :B) and when Syl does transform, he gets very nervous and can't control it well(this could make for some pretty funny moments).

For the last questions, Syl is a boy~ the nearby locals of the shops he goes to to get supplies gave him that girly nickname, haha. Mew, on the other hand, is technically genderless, but leans more on the girl scale if nothing else. But really only because I'm thinking of making mews personality really clingy and a scaredy cat while mew has amnesia. If I left anything out don't hesitate to ask! :3

You're ideas are all wonderful and thank you again for all your help!!<3
( I really love your comic as well, its amazing so far! Eevee and mudkip are so cute<3 )

Sorry for the long reply ; w ;

EDIT: I also forgot to throw in that mew can also transform into other pokemon just like Syl, but you probably knew that *v*. The only difference is that mew will physically transform, and Syl can only create the illusion. (Between you and me, that what the title of my story is- mew and Zorua, or 'Power or Folly,' power meaning mew who has great power and can transform, and folly(which means fake, or trick) meaning zorua who only creates illusion. I might incorporate this into the story somehow as well, but I wasn't thinking about it when I made the title :'D)

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April 24th, 2014, 1:02 pm

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this is gona be another long one XD

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@crispybagel: lol its ok, i left a long comment to begin with ^u^ this ones gona be long too .u.

maybe mew controls the balance of the world, and instead of a human distorting the balance, mew losing her (im still gona stick to the term her cause i dont like calling living things 'it' because im way too nice XD) memory causes her to lose the power to control the balance. and she has to regain it to remember how to control the balance.

and as for the royals, maybe they dont like her cause they think shes too powerful and she might overthrow them?
or it could be a long family history where their relatives got upset at each other and for generations the two families hated each other?

though if you use the latter idea, someones gona have to work out how mew are born to have a family if they are genderless .-.
maybe they use dito XD

hahaha im such a dork
and i think you should put the title in the story, i like the idea of syl not being able to 'transform', its no fun if a character is too perfect. ;P

and maybe syl helped her cause he knows she controls the balance but he could just be a nice guy and not want to leave her KOd… how did she end up KOd? was she in the woods and got attacked? it would probably help you figure out why he helped her if you figure out how she got KOd

sorry for the long comments. i tend to go a little overboard when it comes to ideas... i hate having to chose then later on thinking of a better idea but i already used an idea. so i lay all possible options out then make a decision harder then picking which starter i want XD picking which ending i want is the WORST! i cant decide what i want to happen! lol sorry bout that whole comment nonsense, not that this will be the last chapter book i post XD

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April 24th, 2014, 2:21 pm

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@andreya225:
I think that's a great idea! Mew could be one that keeps the natural balance of that land from falling into chaos~
Having mew with amnesia is a perfect fit to that as well- mew could not remember what exactly she was doing to keep the world in balance (that is, after she figured out that it was her that was even keeping it in balance). I also just remembered something that might be able to fit well later on --spoiler alert lol-- perhaps the way that mew was able to keep the world in balance was to sacrifice her free will to travel around freely, and she has to give up being able to be with her friends. I think that could make for some deep feels later on ; v ;

ah one thing I was wondering, would it be a better idea to fuse this story with the official PMD game, with all its characters like the wigglytuffs guild and treasure town, or have it take place in a different time, with a different place in the pokemon world? You don't have to answer if you dont want too / w \

I'm almost drawing a blank at how she got KO'd bleh :'c
But as for Syl I think I might go with what you said, that he is just a nice guy and couldn't just leave mew.

and trust me, I go overboard too CX I often love starting comics but always end up having no idea where to go with them.
And seriously thank you this is really helpful I actually have some story to go on now :'D

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April 24th, 2014, 2:46 pm

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@crispybagel: ^u^ glad i can help
and its up to you wether you make it in the wiggilytuff guild time. it sounds good either way :P
and for her getting KOd, you can put she was attacked by the royals in there. although im curious... who are you going to make royalty in the comic?...
GASP! IDEA ALERT! what if syl if a former royal but ran away cause he was tired of being treated differently?? and thats why he cant go on adventures cause hes scared of being found out!! and hes having doubts about saving mew from his family but later on learns the mew is nice and has to prove to his family that shes cool!!! :D

but then using your idea of sacrificing her free will *which i LOVE that idea btw* she has to leave but before she does syl's family forgives her and that can add onto the feels =^u^=

*although when the comic finishes ill probably make an alternate ending in my head where everyones happy cause ill most likley have a teenage girl spaz attack from feels overdose if i dont >3>*

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April 24th, 2014, 3:19 pm

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Wahh its perfect

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@andreya225:

ok omg this is perfect (* o *)

Syl being in a 'royal' family is the most perfect scenario for the reason why he is afraid to venture too far!
And mew being targeted by that same 'royal' family is genius omg

That got me thinking- Mabye ho-oh as one of the high royals in their world? Or would that be too much? Because I was thinking that mabye there would be this pokemon that is highly influencial ( but not exactly a king or queen there would just be royals ) and Slyvesters' family is one of that pokemons' subordinates?

And what if they thought mew abandoned her post for keeping the world in balance, and they (Syls' mom or dad or both) are after her to punish her and force her someway to do it again? (but they end up not being able to because mew doesn't know how to keep the world in balance anymore)
and during this all there would be the pokemon that actually caused mew to leave her post- and this would be the villain in the story!

Ahh this is perfect I'm going to try and start making ch 1 pg 1 right away~(* w *)~

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April 24th, 2014, 3:50 pm

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@crispybagel: ahahahaa i know that feeling, getting exited over your comic when you get an idea XD

i love the plot, and as far as im concerned i dont have any other ideas ;P the hooh idea is good, i like that one. but whos the villain? i dont want to invade your comic too much so ill let you pick who the villain is :P *although for ideas id pick gengar, cause he needs a spot in there if hes not a human he needs to be involved with the worlds unbalance somehow* heh heh, so much for not invading the comic >u>

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April 24th, 2014, 4:14 pm

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@andreya225:
Invade the comic all you want, I'm super grateful for your ideas!
I was actually thinking of having mewtwo as the villain, because his ideals and perfect world are incredibly different than the one mew is providing. Does that sound too cliche? All i can do is cliche omg

Regardless, thank you so much again @ w @

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April 25th, 2014, 10:07 am

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@crispybagel: go with whatever cliche idea you want! i actually like the mewtwo idea :P

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April 25th, 2014, 10:44 pm

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From this conversation I can tell this comic is gonna go places!

Anyway here's an idea for Mewtwo. His goal would be to create the world that suites his ideals by taking the place of Mew as the balance of power; since their powers are so similar. And maybe he could have a few henchmen, assassins, etc., on his side to try and eliminate Mew (Also some of them could share the same ideals as Mewtwo while others could be just a gun for hire, maybe?). Cause Mew's memory loss isn't enough for him. Nothing must get in the way!

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April 26th, 2014, 1:16 am

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@Gigazyber:

Thats awesome! I can almost see the new characters coming up for the assassins that mewtwo would hire = v =

You were able to pin down exactly what I thought would be a perfect goal that mewtwo would strive for and his reasons why he does what he does! I added it to my 'story so far' page that I'm keeping to remember everything I have planned for the story.

Thank you so much!

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April 27th, 2014, 4:03 am

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@crispybagel: Glad I could help!

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